Saints... Final

[The Reverend Dark Angel]

Justin
It will only be grand when the last of your family is dead.

Thomas
Soon. And yours will join us.

Cut To:
EXT: Thorne Mansion / Ralf?s Car

Lost stands holding Ralf against the side of the car. Ralf is struggling with little effect.

Lost
You will not go in there!

Ralf
Get off of me! This is a family matter of which you are no part!

Lost grabs him and throws him against the tree. Ralf falls to the ground.

Lost
You will soon be the last male heir to the Knight household. If you go into the Thorne?s home you will be nothing more than a corpse in the grave!

Ralf
So be it! He is a traitor and must be dealt with!

Lost punches Ralf.

Lost
I have known him my entire life, I care not if you are his blood, you will not speak of matters you do not understand!

Ralf
He sleeps with the enemy, he is not a Knight!

Ralf kicks at Lost knocking him down. Ralf quickly jumps to his feet and begins to run towards the Mansion. As he does we see Christopher?s car pull into the drive. Ralf watches as he drives by coming to a stop behind Thomas? car.

Cut To:
INT: Thorne Mansion / Living Room

Thomas? head cocks slightly as he hears the screeching of tires. He stands up.

Thomas
It is time.

We hear the door swing open and Christopher comes rushing into the Living Room.

Christopher
Father, Mother? Are you alright?

Justin
For the moment.

Justin lowers his head and shifts his gaze towards Thomas. Christopher spins around already drawing forth his gun only to find Thomas? already in his face.

Thomas
Hello, Christopher.

Christopher
You son of a bitch.

Thomas
Goodbye Christopher.

Christopher yells as he continues to draw his gun from his holster. Thomas pulls back on the trigger and the shot is fired. Christoper stares at him for a moment and his jaw drops, smoke rises from his mouth and nostrils as he falls to his knees and then slumps over on his left side, dead. Thomas then aims the gun at Justin.

Cut To:
EXT: Thorne Mansion / Moment?s before

We see Christopher rush into the house. Ralf starts running towards the Mansion again. Lost gets to his feet and begins sprinting after him. They run until a loud shot is heard. They freeze in their tracks and look at one another before continuing on.

Cut To:
INT: Thorne Mansion / Living Room

Picking up from where we left off.

Thomas
We brought this upon ourselves old man.

Justin
And yet I am now to die?

Thomas
Retrubution must be paid.

Justin lowers his head, Mieke grabs hold of his hand tightly. Thomas closes his eyes and shakes his head as he pulls back on the trigger.

Close Up:
Justin and Mieke?s hand.

We watch as Justin?s hand slips away from Mieke?s.

Cut To:
EXT: Thorne Mansion / Fountain

Lori sits at the fountain. Tears flow from her eyes. Thomas walks into view and she turns her head looking at him. He walks over to her, a sorrowful look on his face.

Lori
You killed them?

Thomas
Yes.

Lori
I am the only one?

Thomas
Your stepmother still lives.

Lori
Why?

Thomas
It had to end.

Lori hugs him and begins to cry on his shoulder.

Lori
It?s not over.

She grabs the gun out of his hand and pulls back a few steps. She aims it at his chest. Thomas gives her a soft smile.

Thomas
No. I suppose not.

Lori
I am sorry.

Thomas
(smiling)
We will see each other again, soon.

Lori
I love you.

Thomas
And I you.

Lori aims her gaze away as she pulls the trigger. She looks back to find Thomas? body on the ground. She lets the gun fall to her side.

Cut To:
INT: Thorne Mansion

Ralf and Lost run through the doors and stop as they look in the living room. They see the lifeless bodies of Christopher and Justin and Mieke weeping over her fallen husbands body. They then hear another shot and go rushing towards the back.

Cut To:
EXT: Thorne Mansion / Fountain

Ralf and Lost stop dead in their tracks as they see Thomas? slain body in front of the fountain. They look at Lori, crying over him holding him to her. Ralf, angered takes two steps forward.

Ralf
My brother? You killed him?

Ralf draws his gun and points it at her. As he does Lost draws his own gun and aims it at Ralf.

Lost
Ralf, no! It is over!

Ralf
No. I can never be over for as long as a Thorne still lives.

Lost
Ralf!

Ralf pulls back the trigger and we watch Lori slump over Thomas? body. Lost pulls his trigger at the same moment and Ralf falls dead. Lost?s gun falls to his side and out of his hand.

Close up:
The gun falling from Lost?s hand to the ground.

Slowly move up and pull back to show Lost standing in the center of the bloody carnage. Sirens can be heard in the distance.

Cut To:
Thorne Knight Cemetary / Day of Burial

Maryann
This is Maryann reporting live from the Thorne Knight Cemetary where a brutal end has befallen both these families. Unable to see through their differences, they now are buried. Perhaps most odd is the gravestone in which I stand in front of. Beneath this large headstone are buried the bodies of Thomas Knight and Laura Thorne. It was widely believed long ago that these two would bring an end to the family rivialry that has ripped through fair Veridian City for the past two centuries. Though their love forbidden, they are now together in death. The only heirs to the family are Mieke Thorne and Aurora Knight, who have seemingly buried the past and combined their companies to create a brighter future.

Cut To:
Streets of Veridian City

A funeral parade is marching through the streets. Every off duty officer, police, fireman, fire offical, cars and trucks, slowly move down the street to the crowd of onlookers. We watch as Bjorn?s coffin, covered with an American flag passes by.

Cut To:
Commishiner Hadley / Walking alongside Bjorn?s coffin.

Kenneth
You were a good man. Too good a man to die like this. But it is finally over. Rest in peace old friend.

Cut To:
Thorne Knight Cemetary / Nighttime

A soft rain has begun to fall. Standing in front of Thomas? and Lori?s headstone are Mieke and Aurora. Lost stands off to the side. No words are spoken as Mieke?s hand extends to take Aurora?s.

Pan Out:

Fade Out:

Roll Credits.

[Suture-Chan]

DUDE! YOU KILLED ME!

AGAIN!

Oh well... Now why isn't this at our board?

Hmmph.

It was pretty good. I felt that even for a re-make, a pattern laid out for you, it was kinda rushed. Characters thown in for effect. Everyone just kinda dies....

"Yes, you killed my sister, but I'll still fuck you"

Jeez man, and you say MY brother's character development was weak?

meh, it still held my attention.

brava

[The Reverend Dark Angel]

It wasn't rushed, it was extremely rushed. I had the first 25 pages done awhile back, but the rest was done like two days before I posted it. I don't like this story one bit, only finished it cause well, I was asked to.

[SPYDERLUV]

HEH HEH

i just read this final part, cause i am being rushed in the library..but i must say that i do like it..

i give it 8 thumbs up [img]biggrin.gif[/img]